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發表於 2004-10-13 01:40 AM
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[原創文章]極短篇:盒尸1、2
Not that the writing is bad, but, you have a lot of description to fill in. Missing parts within the story ain't much to be appreciated, nor is it sohpisticated, it's simply, too much of a 'cool-actor'
The location was missing, so is the time... short is good, it attracts, but just that, you tried too hard to make it look cool and make yourself a good writer that this piece has become nothing more than a failure.
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